I had such a great response to “Aftertaste” last week on Six Sentence Sunday, that I’ve posted another six from it today. It’s a free short story that will be released (probably in May?) before Want, which comes out June 7. It’s written from a different character’s POV and dovetails with a scene from the book.
It doesn’t really need any set-up, except to say that the narrator is 28 and the girl is 17.
I take a deep breath, turn the corner, and there she is: Julianne.
Long legs, long hair, long, graceful fingers twined in the sheet I draped over her after she crashed on my sad futon. I’m still not clear on why she showed up at my place in the middle of the night, barely dressed and rambling an apology, but I couldn’t turn her away. I don’t have much to offer, but whatever she was looking for, she must have found it because, next thing I know, she’s curled up and purring in her sleep. I did take the liberty of tucking a strand of that flaming hair behind her ear. Maybe that’s where the red (so much red) in the dream comes from.
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Great description. I love the use of long..it flows beautifully and creates the perfect pace.
It can go in so many directions. I’m interested in seeing which it takes. Great six!
I don’t have much to offer, but whatever she was looking for, she must have found it because, next thing I know, she’s curled up and purring in her sleep. <– Love this line! Nice six.
Wow, a beautiful six sample, I loved the emotions being discovered/expressed here, so tender. Nice! 😀
Great description and feelings.
What a very endearing description. I feel so fond of Julianne already.
Great six Stephanie! Very beautiful description and pace…
Heh, I’m glad this *seems* tender. 🙂 Thanks for the feedback!
Stephanie, there’s so much going on in this story. I was in love with the dynamic, the tension of _Want_ but hearing it from his side is somehow even more…anxious and fragile. I love it. I really can’t wait to buy _Want_ and to read _Aftertaste_.
Wow, thanks! 😀 There’s definitely tension, both good and bad. It’ll be up to the reader to decide.
Great snippet. As already mentioned, this could go many ways. 🙂
Loved your six! It will be interesting to see how this plays out!
Love this line –> Maybe that’s where the red (so much red) in the dream comes from.
Thanks! It’s a very symbolic part of the short story. 🙂
Ooh, love that last line. Unexpected, visual, and interesting!
Fantastic six!
I like the setup. Redheads are always trouble, right?
Indeed. 😉