Happy Six Sunday! The past few weeks, I’ve been posting lines from the scene where my MC, Dylanie, meets a mystery man outside her second-story balcony at Oakleigh House. So far, he’s called her name, asked to be invited in, and made a few mildly suggestive remarks. Dylan, who is a psychic medium, is trying to figure out if he’s real or a spirit.
He asks her one last time if he can come in:
My brain screams no, no, no!
“Yes.” It comes out like an exhale, one that’s been trapped inside the air-tight cage that is my pathetic life. It feels good to say yes to something unapproved and maybe even dangerous.
Another blink and he’s on the balcony with me. Shit.
Oopsie. Dylan’s in for it now. 🙂
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Alix Cameron said:
Angela Quarles said:
Great pacing and tension, as well as characterization in just 6 sentences! I especially liked this line: “It comes out like an exhale, one that’s been trapped inside the air-tight cage that is my pathetic life.”
K.E. Saxon said:
I’m on the edge of my seat with this one. Dying to know who this guy is and what he wants! Great six!!
Given his quick appearance it seems that he’s of the supernatural/immortal type. But the good news is he asked to come in first rather than just showing up in her house. He has manners. Good six!
Lee Ann Ward said:
Oh, I love love love this part! So happy I’ve had the privilege of reading this one. Woo….so good!
Claire Gillian said:
Seriously good! Those middle three sentences are killer.
Wildcat's Wife said:
Incredible tension and movement. She’s trapped between saying “no” and “yes.” And, on the balcony really makes this leap!
Paula Martin said:
Wow, what a teaser. Can’t wait to read more and find out who he is!
Joyce Scarbrough said:
I love how these six reveal so much more about Dylan than they do about the mysterious man. 😉
Tonya Burrows said:
Oh boy. It’s never good to invite strangers in. What happens next?!?
Ryan Derham said:
Great suspense and mystery as to what he is. Dylanie’s conflict is very credible, too. Great six, Steph!
Jalisa Blackman (@J_M_Blackman) said:
This just keeps getting better and better. The back and forth between fear and desire is fun. You’ve maintained the tension for about three Sundays now and I’m still hooked.
Lorraine Paton said:
Wonderful tension! I love your scene. I can’t wait to find out what happens next!
Wendy S. Russo said:
she liked saying yes. That’s an interesting detail 🙂
Amy Durham said:
Love it when the mouth goes a different direction than the brain! Great six!
Elin Gregory said:
Oh Dylanie! *offers her a taser* He must have quite a high level of mind control. 🙂 nice 6.